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30-SEP-2025 | Excerpt from Mobil's "Please Don't Get Killed" Ad

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Dan Bogachek
September 30, 2025

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Excerpt from Mobil's "Please Don't Get Killed" Ad

Please don’t get killed this Sunday.
We’d like to sell you gas on Monday.

We all have to die sometime.

But we don’t have to die in our cars.

And we certainly don’t have to die in our cars this weekend.

Unfortunately, weekends are murder. And this coming weekend won’t be any different.

The numbers alone are enough to kill you! We lose almost 400 people on the average weekend.

And that’s an average weekend, ladies and gentleman. (On holiday weekends, it’s even worse.)

So the lesson is damnably clear: if more than 165 people get killed on Sundays and only (?) 90 odd get killed on Tuesdays, something can be done.

And the somebody who can do it is you. 🏁

  • Hook — doesn’t get more in your face than that. Time to put a label to a pattern we’ve seen before. It’s the: “Our self-interest benefits you. So sue us!” line.

  • Great repetition on “die”. Notice how it elaborates further on each rep? And it uses joiner words like “but” and “and.” Layered repetition throughout to transition from one idea to another.

  • The tactical sentence-in-parentheses, nice. Someone took notes from VW!

  • “And the somebody who can do it is you” is the perfect mini-hook to set up the rest of the ad. It’s calling you to action — but you need to read on to find out what, exactly.